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Dear Sir/Madam,

My name is Mrs Dobson am writing this mail on behalf of my duagther¹ Penelope Dobson a prospective student.

I will want him² to study the Politics in your institution,

³Am an accountant ³am working in one of those banks here
in Singapore you’ might have a little bit understanding
about we accountant that we are not ready to lose a
penny due to our profession⁴.
³Am paying this school fee on one ⁵Condition:
I must see the Letter of Admission or acceptance letter from the school to ⁶again student visa.

³Am capable of paying the school fee per semester. ⁵i will pay upon his arrival, i will send the AFFIDAVIT OF FINANCIAL SUPPORT with the remaining documents.

About the Registration/application fee ⁵i wanted to send it through ³money order but the bank manager ⁶were ³am working said the amount ⁴it to small for me to send that ⁵i should add it up with the school fee⁴.

I will make the International cheque ¹avaiable to your institution. Once ⁵i receieve¹ the Letter of ¹dmission , ⁵i will write the⁴ International cheque and send it direct from my bank,
⁵i will pay upon his² arrival.